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Tuesday, July 20, 2021

 

DIALOGUE and other things.
Ruben D. Gonzales

Are your characters getting lost in your dialogue? Is your prose over populated and slowed by tags? In a masters class I took we spent a good deal of time deleting tags from our works in progress. The challenge of course is if you’re not careful your reader may lose track of who is talking and responding. Well written dialogue is a powerful tool for showing conflict. Conflict makes are our characters come alive.

May stood behind the dessert case like a guard outside a jail cell.
    “What can I get you?”
    “I’ll have one of those bear claws.”
    “Is that all?”
    “Well, I’d also like a cinnamon bun.”
    “What else?”
    “I thought I’d get a large de-cafĂ© too.”
    “Thought or are you sure?”
    “Look, May Watkins, I’m sure.”
    “Are you? Tell me, Emma, are you always so sure?”


The missing tags above are the – “he said/she said”.

Content dialogue demonstrates what a character says that no other character knows or says without the tag: he said - she said. Content dialogue can stand on its own, without adding verbs and adverbs. Good dialogue will show readers who your speakers are and how they feel. Look for the best verb. Stephen King is famous for the quote, “I believe the road to hell is paved with adverbs.”

There’s also form in dialogue. Most people speak in short fragment sentences with only an occasional complete sentence thrown in. In conversations between characters there should be a good deal of interrupting going on, especially during an argument. Long “discourses” should be broken up by the opposing characters reaction to the speech. The reaction could be a verbal utterance or a silent gesture. The phrase, “Laura raised her left eye brow at least an inch”, is a beat not a tag.

“Beats” are different than “tags”. Using a beat instead of a tag can serve the same purpose but in a different form.

            Tag: “We’re going to need more than one horse,” Layla said as she grabbed another lead.

            Beat: “We’re going to need more than one horse.” Layla snatched another lead from the tack cabinet.

Shortening your long speeches can make your passages sharper and less oratory. If the topic of a section does drag on for more than a paragraph then interrupt it with a beat. If the content is strong your readers should continue to understand who is speaking.

Review all the tags you used in your work in progress. Evaluate which you can eliminate. If they don’t contribute to “clarity” then delete them. Rewrite dialogue to expose a character’s feelings, (unless they are hiding something). Dialogue should be specific to each character. Even in a crowded room the dialogue in your scene should only be between the two main characters that are responsible for moving the story along.

Something I don’t do enough – read your dialogue aloud and listen for the flow. Is it smooth and are the transitions between characters smooth? Even better – read aloud to someone. See if they can follow the conversation without getting lost. Reading groups and open mic sessions are good for feedback on whether your writing is clear. Don’t be afraid of a constructive critique. Dialogue should follow the norms of everyday speech – the speech of the everyday in your story.

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Sunday, July 18, 2021

TO DO

Photo by Priscilla Du Preez on Unsplash

Those pesky To-Do lists—

I have them everywhere. There is a notebook on my phone and a file on my computer. There are multiple written lists in diaries and spiral binders, on notepads with kitty themes, and we can’t forget those little scraps of paper. I have a list titled Old Stuff To Do that I never look at; another To Do Eventually; yet another To Do Sooner; and a current list with no title which is the one I work from most often. Then there’s the list of things to do TODAY! It’s usually an improvised jot meant only for those imminent things I really must do, though it often grows out of all proportion, getting longer instead of shorter the way it’s supposed to.

Needless to say, I have a list specifically for writing tasks such as blog ideas, interviews, and deadlines. Since it’s summer, there’s a gardening list as well, though some of it—the big stuff like digging out the peony bed—carries over from year to year. “Fix the deck” had been on that list for a decade until just recently when my husband finally put in a patio. Next: the Catio!

Sometimes when I don’t look at a list for a while, the items go away of their own accord. Other times, I can’t remember what they mean, as with this one:

Multi Pass random (or radon?) rewrite X 5 (S?) passes

incinerate

If you have any idea what I was trying to tell myself, please let me know. Otherwise, this scrap is going into the recycle.

 

But at the end of the day, 

does all this list-making improve my quality of life? In a way, it’s necessary. I’m a bit obsessive and have a less than perfect memory, so unless I write things down, I’m either a) constantly going over them in my head, or b) trying to remember what they were so I can go over them in my head.

What would it be like to let go, to have no need of lists? To be free from obligation and chores? To live in the moment? I do that when I’m writing, though I suppose that’s not exactly living. 

I wrote a poem…



Monday, July 12, 2021

Esther Morris, First Woman Judge in the United States by Sarah McNeal

 


Statue of Esther Morris in Cheyenne, Wyoming

Quite naturally, Esther Morris was a judge in the beautiful state of Wyoming back in 1870. But hers is not the story of a female looking to make a name for herself as an advocate for women’s suffrage. Nope, Esther spent 55 years of her life living the tame life in New York state and then Illinois as a milliner and a housewife. I know. It’s just not what one might think a woman who will be judge would be doing with her life, but these are the facts, ma’am. She and her second husband (don’t know what happened to the first one) moved to Wyoming Territory where her husband opened up a saloon in a gold mining camp in South Pass City in 1869. Doesn’t seem like the expected beginnings of a lady judge, does it? Well, hang on because I’m about to tell you the way it all came about.

Just so happens, that year a territorial representative from South Pass introduced a bill giving women the right to vote and hold public office. Now there’s a little hidden agenda in this move due to the fact that Wyoming needed some women. The Wyoming’s all male legislature approved the bill to attract women to the state. It was like putting out sugar water to attract humming birds. Wyoming was the first territory (eventually, state) in American history to empower women. The territorial governor, John Campbell, was one of the strongest backer of the new law. He was eager to take more actions toward the political power of women, so in 1870, Campbell began to search for women qualified and willing to be appointed as justices of the peace. Low and behold, Esther Morris became Campbell’s first and only successful appointment.

Esther Hobart Morris

Though hailed by American suffragists because of her appointment as the first female judge, not only in America, but in the world, Esther didn’t seem to have been all that dedicated as an activist for women’s rights. She just happened to be in the right place at the right time, or so it seems. She was appointed to serve out the term of a man who resigned, and served only nine months as justice of the peace. She tried 26 cases with competence during her time as judge, but retired from her post in November 1870 and never sought public office again.

Later, when asked about the issue of women’s suffrage, Esther replied that women would do well to leave the matter in the hands of men. Though she supported women’s rights, she advocated a more gradual approach would be more successful. Like some of you, I was stunned to learn this little tidbit about her. You’d think she would’ve stood on a soap box after such an accomplishment encouraging other women to seek office. Disappointing, to say the least.

Even so, regardless of her reluctance to be revered as an activist, Esther Morris has often been celebrated as an important symbol of women’s rights. I guess you have to start somewhere. In 1890, one of her sons began calling her the “mother of woman suffrage” in his Cheyenne newspaper. That just goes to show you the power of the pen—and suggestion. About twenty years after her death in 1902, a witness claimed that Morris had pushed for the introduction of the original bill granting women the right to vote, but of course, that was not what the evidence supports. But in the twists and turns of historical fact, the title of “first woman judge” has continued to be a symbol in the long battle of women’s rights in America. It’s a near fact anyway. Bronze statues at the United States Capitol and in Cheyenne still honor her memory. 

So if anyone ever asks you to take a position that would be a first in history, just say “yes.” And that’s the end of my lesson on how to make a political statement. Stay tuned for more adventures and historical markers.

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Sarah J. McNeal is a multi-published author of several genres including time travel, paranormal, western and historical fiction. She is a retired ER and Critical Care nurse who lives in North Carolina with her four-legged children, Lily, the Golden Retriever. Besides her devotion to writing, she also has a great love of music and plays several instruments including violin, bagpipes, guitar and harmonica. Her books and short stories may be found at Prairie Rose Publications and its imprints Painted Pony Books, and Fire Star Press. She welcomes you to her website and social media:

 

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Friday, July 2, 2021

Dear Interwebs

Wow. Where did June go? July is starting off just as hectic so this month I'm cheating and sharing a previously published post from my blog.


Dear Interwebs,

We need to talk. This has been building for a while and no, it’s not me. It’s you. What? You don’t understand? You thought everything was fine? Well, let me see if I can spell it out for you.

  • No, I do not want to stay logged in.
  • No, I do not want you to send me notifications.
  • No, I do not want you to remember my  password.
  • No, I do not want to chat. Please stop asking every few seconds. If by some chance I change my mind, I know where to find you.
  • No, I do not want to log in using Facebook or Google or any other third party.
  • Yes, I know your site uses cookies. Everyone’s site uses cookies. Yes, I know it's a legal thing; it's still annoying.
  • No, I don’t want to sign up for “email deals” just because I visited your site. Once again, if I change my mind, I know where to find you.
  • Stop with the snarky “No, I don’t want to save money, etc.” messages when I don’t want to give you my email address. It’s not a good look for you.
  • No, I’m not a robot but please stop with the “chose the pictures that show whatever” collages; they’re unnecessarily stressful.
  • I don’t want to have to close several pop-ups and scroll past videos just to read an article on your site. You’re not that special.
  • Auto-play videos will immediately put you on my “never visit this site again” list. Seriously. Why do you think I need to be forced to watch a video on how Himalayan Pink Salt is “made”? It’s salt; it already exists, it’s not being made. On another note, I simply don’t care.

Thanks for listening. I would like to think that you will take my words to heart and change. However, I’m not going to hold my breath.

Signed,

Me

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